‘Adelina’s Wings’ – Editing Example

Hello; I like to go through a writer’s work as any first time reader would so, my comments will reflect that. Take
Hello; I like to go through a writer’s work as any first time reader would so, my comments will reflect that. Take
BELOW IS AN EXAMPLE OF A DEVELOPMENTAL EDIT OF A CHILDREN’S BOOK MANUSCRIPT.
EXCEPT FOR IDENTIFYING INFORMATION I HAVE LEFT IT AS IS.
My comments are always in dark pink. I make corrections and give my impressions as I go along…